Amazing how we see what others seem to be able to do that we can’t, and they’re seeing the same thing in reverse. I am super-impressed by want you did–to me, the alliteration pales by comparison! God bless!
Thank you for reading/commenting. It’s like we tell the students–don’t change your answers unless you’re sure they’re wrong. Your first instinct usually is correct…God bless!
cbhanek 
Very original!
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Wonderful alliteration on a Haiku. I find that very hard to do.
Amazing how we see what others seem to be able to do that we can’t, and they’re seeing the same thing in reverse. I am super-impressed by want you did–to me, the alliteration pales by comparison! God bless!
I love the alliteration of the ‘f’ sound to mirror the fly. The first version is my preferred of the two! Fabulous xx
Thank you for taking time to read and to comment in ways that specify and affirm. God bless you! Thanks!
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I’d say the last one has more punch but they’re both good reads.
Thank you for reading/responding. Those last lines always do me in. Thanks for weighing in. I really appreciate your feedback! God bless you!
You’re more than welcome. Last times are always tricky.
I think I like the first ending most 🙂
Thank you for reading/commenting. It’s like we tell the students–don’t change your answers unless you’re sure they’re wrong. Your first instinct usually is correct…God bless!