Private Screening

Ending #1

Ending #1

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Ending #2

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13 responses to “Private Screening

  1. Wonderful alliteration on a Haiku. I find that very hard to do.

    • Amazing how we see what others seem to be able to do that we can’t, and they’re seeing the same thing in reverse. I am super-impressed by want you did–to me, the alliteration pales by comparison! God bless!

  2. I love the alliteration of the ‘f’ sound to mirror the fly. The first version is my preferred of the two! Fabulous xx

  3. I’d say the last one has more punch but they’re both good reads.

  4. I think I like the first ending most 🙂

    • Thank you for reading/commenting. It’s like we tell the students–don’t change your answers unless you’re sure they’re wrong. Your first instinct usually is correct…God bless!

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